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Chapter 12!

Posted on: Apr 04, 2024
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pls do not comment until I say you can :) and that’s supposed to be a quill on the skin
Link to skin for the story I wrote this for is in the comments
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Comments: 39

AlpineEco
itsnxna
OHHHH I understand nowww that makes so much senseeee

what are they getting at McDonald’s :3
I don’t know their menu that well :\
I don’t really go to McDonald’s so I don’t know there menu. I just said that they went to McDonald’s cuz that’s one of the most known fast food restaurants
itsnxna
AlpineEco
“But,” Okami went on,” That doesn’t mean it wasn’t real,” ok what?! had Aiden just heard that right? Mabey he was still dreaming or mabey he had misheard Okami yeah that had to be it. Okami could sense the confusion and shock going through Aiden. “To put it simply you are one of the few people who are allowed into the world of Narkanda through dreams as are Mango, Peach, and myself”
OHHHH I understand nowww that makes so much senseeee

what are they getting at McDonald’s :3
I don’t know their menu that well :\
itsnxna
AlpineEco
Aiden’s head started feeling like it was spinning. He then chose to look around the room he was in. The walls were a warm shade of yellow with circular patterns of orange and white, and to his left was a small wooden nightstand that appeared to be hand made. A lamp stood on the nightstand with a small clock ticking the seconds away, and in the far right corner was a shelf with lots of small trinkets most small enough to fit in one’s hand.
ooo pretty
p3anutbutter
I liked chapter seven a lot. I didn't find it cringe, exactly, but maybe a little cliche? (Actually, my part was probably more cliche with the whole sad almost-dying scene, so I can't talk.) Either way, it made a really great plot twist.

This is a group effort anyway, so each chapter should reflect its author. It's true that the story did change quite a lot, but that's kinda just what happens when twelve different people come together to write something, lol. Were there parts I didn't like very much? Yeah. But overall I think it was a success.
TyphoonTwister
SushiSloth
Is everyone gonna keep debating on this? To be fair, I kept the theme UNTIL CHAPTER 7 CAME OUT
I feel like Chapter 7 brought back the theme that I'd intended.
SushiSloth
TyphoonTwister
I think the story started picking up around chapter 7. In MY opinion there was no cringe. Chapter 7 was a turning point for the story where it really began to become great.
Is everyone gonna keep debating on this? To be fair, I kept the theme UNTIL CHAPTER 7 CAME OUT
GloomySkies
xMiku123x
WE NEED TO MAKE A BOOK TWO!!!!
*nod, nod* agreed
GloomySkies
GoldnGamer5701
The story went in the wrong direction in my opinion in Chapter 7. It went.. Cringey a bit IN MY OPINION. So in Chapter 8 I hinted this.

Plot twist..
It’s all a dream.

Everyone went with it. Me? Went with it a bit, BUT THEN I DESTROYED IT ALL!
Then. You did this. Small annoyance.
Okay, okay, in my own opinion. . . I hate the whole "it was just a dream" type thing. Just in general I hate it too. THOUGH if done right, it could be good. . . . But this is just my opinion!
xMiku123x
AlpineEco
YES
DOUBLE YES!!!!!!
AlpineEco
GoldnGamer5701
questioning the weapon?! XD I chose a frying pan because I wanna to add some humor. I’m future activities i’m planning on adding more humor
I thought it was funny lol